His hacking cough echoed in the mine tunnel. He set down his pickaxe and waited for the dust to settle, instead using his empty hands to pull up his grimy shirt to cover his mouth, serving as a makeshift air filter. When the air seemed a bit less hazy in the light of his lantern, he grabbed his pickaxe again, once more releasing settled dust into the air as he chipped away at the rock.
The cycle repeated a few more times.
Finally, a stroke of his pickaxe revealed a glint of gold, and his grim face steadily brightened.ย
This story was written in response to Carrot Ranch’s April 24, 2023, prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less), write a story about the color of hope. Who is in need of hope and why? How can you use color to shape the story? Pick a color, any color. Go where the prompt leads!
Nice use of grit to burnish the gold-reveal. His labors may have serious health consequences (SSS) in the future, perhaps?
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They likely will, indeed.
Oh, I did overlook an idea for this week’s SSS. Maybe I’ll write a second entry for it this week.
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There ya go! ๐
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Loved the grimy atmosphere offset by the welcome reward. ๐ Great snippet, Nicole! โ
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Thanks, Tom. ๐
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This is just awesome.
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Thanks, Sadje ๐
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Youโre welcome
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I love this take, the contrast between his horrible working conditions and the hope that gold can bring to man is brilliant.
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Thanks! While I was thinking of a title for it, I was first thinking about using the word “desperation” in it. Ended up deciding to focus on the prompt for the title instead.
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That title would have fit just as well.
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Love the glint of gold in the grime! Nicely done, Nicole! ๐๐๐
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Thanks, Dawn ๐
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Gold is the color he hoped for, but will he have the health to enjoy it? Nicely done.
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Thanks, D ๐
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