If shame was a song, it would be played on an out of tune piano in a large empty room, the notes painfully, obviously, off key. The melody drifts left, lower, and deeper, and does not return to the right. The simple beat of the chords is a slow thud in the echoing silence.
Close the window, lest someone below on the street accidentally overhear what is being played. Cancel plans, let no one enter this room, and bar the door if necessary. This song was meant for only one recipient: the one who needs to hear the apology.
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This story was written in response to these prompts:
Girlie on the Edgeβs 6 Sentence Story prompt: Beat
Carrot Ranch‘s August 22, 2022, prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less), write a story exploring shame as an emotion or theme. Consider how to use shame to drive a cause-and-effect story. How does it impact a character? Is there a change? Go where the prompt leads!
Very poignant words here- paints a really vivid scene! β€
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Thanks! The two prompts combined surprisingly easily with each other.
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we cannot get along
we do not sing the same song
the pry the why
piano song
feeling still so strong tho
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Nice rhyming!
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May the apology (or be given) come to relieve the shame.
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A heartfelt, honest conversation with an apology does wonders for relieving and releasing shame.
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What a poetic description of the discordant nature of shame.
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Thank you, Jenne! π
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“If shame was a song, it would be played on an out of tune piano”. Great opening line.
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Thanks, Doug! π
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Apt metaphor, Nicole. Apologies are often “out of tune”, tend to get a little messy and for sure meant for an audience of one.
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Thanks! And it’s always awkward in the room when they’re happening, and they draw attention to themselves like those off key notes.
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Excellent picturization of a mindset!
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Thank you, Reena π
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Yet, isn’t it a miracle when the apology is sincere & accepted, that the off key notes do not sound off anymore?
Your metaphor is engaging, Nicole.
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It absolutely is, Spira. We just have to listen to the song for long enough.
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A fitting analogy. Music has the ability to say more than words can ever do.
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Thanks, Keith. Music is an incredible mode of expression.
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I love a good metaphor, and this is one!
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Thanks! π
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Music speaks that which cannot be expressed into words. Hopefully the receiver is ready for a listen.
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Hopefully they are!
Thanks for reading π
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We all play the tune at one time or another, and all want to hear another play it on occasion.
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We sure do.
Thanks for reading π
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Nice pairing of the two prompts and conditions. Poignant play on shame and the need to hide from outsiders; not everyone needs to know the details, right?
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Thanks, Liz π
Exactly; not everything needs to be shared publically.
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Great take on the prompt(s). I repeat what Jenne said, above.
Maybe the song is playing in a loop. They say shame is hard to shake, differentiating it from guilt or embarrassment.
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Thanks! Oh, it playing in a loop is an interesting idea.
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Beautifully poetic.
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Thank you, Anne π
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Nice take on the prompt, Nicole. Played off-key…, great line.
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Thank you! π
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You are welcome.
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wow – Nicole.
What a powerful image and killer strong last line.
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Thanks, Gary π
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Too often that apology remains unsaid creating rifts, distance and discouragement.
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An unfortunate reality!
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Choces… we all have them, we all make them.
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Very poetic take on the prompt. Love it!
It sums up all the shame stories really.
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Thank you, Gloria π
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